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The Overflowing Bra

BigWillieStyle
Alias: Agent Bristow
Sydney Bristow has to beat her archnemesis, Anna Espinoza to get possession of a mysterious Rambaldi device.  Can she beat Sark and Anna to it?  What happens to her when she accidentally sets it off?
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andrat2000
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4

Written by a real Alias fan. A good thing for people knowing Alias, you don't need to put an extra effort on describing the characters. But all that was necessary you did well. Though the BE description isn't a full 5 point.
What made the technical quality a 4 only is the fact that you used 2 line spacing in the document, that made it nearly impossible to read. The first thing I did was to reduce to 1,5 lines.
Writing style is really very good.

Bill Pratt
Overall= 3, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 3

Frankly I had no clue this was based on a TV show until he told me and didn't suffer from a lack of description.


Yes, I live in a cave.


But I am a big boob fan, rather than an ├╝berboob fan. I liked how she wound up, but how she got there wasn't exactly my kink.


I commented in private on his style.

Dude
Overall= 3, BE= 2, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

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