The Definitive BE Story Archive

The Overflowing Bra

Bill Pratt
Ed: Chapter 1
In his own dreams, Ed is the star. But not for long. His dreams are about to become reality.
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Overall= 3, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

VlGxzu Hey, thanks for the blog article.Thanks Again. Want more.

The guy with a different name every time
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Great writing Ed, keep it up!

Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4

Liked the build up... made me wish I was Marsha... I wonder if he'll run into her again.

Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Huzzah. I was hoping this story would get an edit and (fingers crossed) a continuation!

Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Awesome start, can't wait to read more. Good work developing characters in a short space, maybe a few many glib asides, but nice to have a sense of style anyway. Write more!

Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5

Very nice indeed the style wich you presented the charecters and story is refreshing .

I can not wait till the next chapters .

very nice

Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Excellent work. I am very happy to see that you have picked up this story and given it more polish. I enjoyed the original very much, and I hope you continue working on this storyline. Your concept is truly wonderful: dreams are a private matter, often from even ourselves, what could be more interestingly discordant when our sexual dreams become physical reality? Thank you and please keep up the good work.

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