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The Overflowing Bra

Bill Pratt
Ed: Chapter 2
Without the slightest idea what he is doing, Ed begins to explore the world of dreams. Should have spent more time on developing the hypothesis, Ed.
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Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 5

Very nice indeed.

Hes got to learn to controle himself before he gets into trouble

Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 5

Not as much BE in this one, so I gave it a lower BE score.

The characters didn't get a 5 here since Tanya wasn't really in the picture long enough for me to get a good idea of her character. Maybe she'll make a reappearance in another chapter? I was tempted to give it a 5 anyway because of the focus on Ed's 'awakening' to his powers so to speak.

Still enjoyable overall.

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