The Definitive BE Story Archive

The Overflowing Bra

Bill Pratt
Ed: Chapter 10
In the kitchen with Ed and Zofia;
At school with Ed and Melissa;
On the streets with Audrey and The Elf;
And one shadowy, mysterious figure in the, er, shadows.
Average Scores:

Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4

In a perfect world I'd rate each chapter but that is unlikely suffice it to say the series is great and I am enjoying it very much.

In this chapter and in a few of the others there have been instances when changes are made and no 'real world' comparison is offered to give us an idea of the end result. For example in this chapter Zofia is altered in a specific way but it isn't clear to what 'general' dimension. Please understand I would not want to bog down your creative process by having you calculate/obsess over every detail etc but in some situations a little more detail can help make things clearer.

Jason G
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4

I tripped over a few typos in this one, but the story line is getting better and better with every chapter. Keep it up!

Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4

This story just keeps getting better and better, the plot twists truely are fun. Its not just the sex that is interesting the plot is worthy of being read in any situation. Keep up the good work!

Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 4

keep going! this is getting good!

Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 5

still a great story. I wait anxiously for the next chapter.

Anon Y. Mous
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Love the story.

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