The Definitive BE Story Archive

The Overflowing Bra

pakled
pakled05@hotmail.com
Dr. Gonzaga's Erotic Extract
The Literary equivalent of fruitcake; incredibly dense, much too sweet, gets passed around a lot, and takes forever to get through..;) Actually, a 'botched' attempt at a Bearchive challenge. Read that they wanted a story to illustrate, went back, and found just a comic-book-length description. I'm about 21 pages over that. Victorian setting, and tried to convey the eroticism without having to use all the shopworn words...possibly the only story subitted here not containing the word 'pussy'..;) Enjoy. checked for spelling, but may have occasional dings..mea culpa
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eekee
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

One of my favourite bits of not-Proust ever!

Baalzabul
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

This was a refreshing departure from the standard BE story. The story had a level of sophistication which was thouroughly enjoyable. The premise of the story was sound. The development of the story line was well done. Overall a very good story.

deux_anges
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

A very refreshing writing style and loved it. But then again, I'm a fan of all this Victoriana stuff anyway.

Slack
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4

Not totally in love with the Victoran grammer but that's a minor point on an otherwise good story.

bman
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

very good all around story

Chase
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Really great, just would have liked more be...

oscine
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

A delightful tale, most originally written!

Very Free
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 5

I enjoyed that one. I'd like to see more boobs in the lovemaking scenes, and overall. Overflowing, button-popping gonzagas - er gazongas are always a popular item. Abigail could've had a potion-induced pair of wallowing whoppers. I'm not complaining tho.

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