The Definitive BE Story Archive

The Overflowing Bra

Bill Pratt
Kerry: Omnibus

Revisions of Kerry chapters 1 through 5 as well as chapters 6 and 7, wherein Kerry subs in for the regular teacher and covers sex-ed at a Catholic girl’s school.

Will Victoria earn a passing mark from Miss Malloy, or is she too squeaky clean and doomed to fail?

Average Scores:

Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4

I think your Kerry stories are among the best of the very best in this archive. I hope you keep writing more of them!

Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

The Kerry stories are a ton of fun. Quick little stories about casual self indulgent omnipotence. It's whimsical sexual fun.

Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

I love it

The Good Admiral
Overall= 3, BE= 2, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

Great writing style, however... I might be alone in this but I prefer greater substance to the actual changes. The characters are fun but I miss the detail of the changes.

Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 5

Obviously you read much of the criticism posted here, and your work reflects that. I found the last two installments a bit difficult to follow entirely, but that's probably because I'm a dullard. I agree with the poster who inquired about her past. Seems like there's a lot of potential there. Regardless, great work overall.

Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5

She's not evil, she is bitchy at best.

But as was said this just feels different than the earlier parts. Not say it is worse, just different. The flow and tone are just not the same. Any who still enjoyable to read.

Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

The last 2 chapters are very well written, and detail oriented. Mister Pratt is clearly a talented wordsmith. The storyline, however, seems to me to have stalled.

I'm also waiting for Kerry to let her hair down and really exact some revenge on people from her past. Surely, she's got some ex-boyfriend who deserves to be looked in on. What about the dullsville job she was trapped in? The boss who patronized her, or denied her a promotion because she didn't have the looks? She's EVIL now, right?

Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

It was good as usual, but 6 and 7 don't really feel like the other chapters.

aryan man
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 1, Technical= 3

to be brutally honest about this, the last two chapters were not up to past Kerry caliber. i don't know what has gotten in to you but these aren't Kerry.

The Light Fantastic
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 5

These stories are generally good.

My one complaint is how quickly you switch between, I don't know. Scenes, I suppose. Thoughts. The story jumps around a bit.

As far as I can tell, that's kind of a theme you're going for, but I don't think it works. It's a bit confusing.

Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5

An enjoyable continuation of the series. I look forward to more.

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