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The Overflowing Bra

Encounter Emily
Chapter 4 in the ongoing adventures of Matt. Amber, Bree, Candice and Danielle are all keeping Matt busy. He needs a break, and did he just see someone in the house?
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Benji Dude
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 3

Good stuff! Descriptions could do with a little more work and you need to check your writing, seeing quite a few typos/ grammar mistakes. All that aside though I can't wait to read more. Keep at it!

Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

Great.. just plain great.. i cant wait for more storys :)

Overall= 4, BE= 2, Characters= 5, Technical= 3

I really like the variety I'm seeing, the only thing that might be improved is description.

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