The Definitive BE Story Archive

The Overflowing Bra

Paul Gerard
The Temple Treat Part 2 (A World Of Altaerna story)
The Creature is back, and her high priestess is about to learn the hard way that tricking a goddess can inflate the ego in the short run, but letting her find out she's been duped for a decade may very well lead to other parts inflating out of control... or is there more to it than just painful revenge? (Part 2 of most likely 3)
Average Scores:

elvis interuptus
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5


Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 3

Well thought out and eminently likable.

sum yung gai
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4

A fascinating setting with some great descriptions, and I like the way the Sphinx thinks. Some English malapropisms, but they are easily forgiven.

Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
Due to comment spam, any new posts with http in them will be destroyed.
Your Nickname:

Rate this story from 1-5 stars (5 stars is best) in the following categories:

Overall Enjoyment(How much did you like the story overall?)
1 2 3 4 5

BE Description (Detail, quantity, quality)
1 2 3 4 5

Characters (Descriptions, likeability)
1 2 3 4 5

Technical Quality (Writing style, grammar, etc.)
1 2 3 4 5

Your comments on the story: