The Definitive BE Story Archive

The Overflowing Bra

Paul Gerard
The Temple Treat Part 3 (A World of Altaerna Story)
Five years after the events of part 2, Saphina the ex-priestess, and Dawnielle aka 5PH-1NX, her former sphinx goddess turned Morphing Alien Robotic Researcher, find themselves pitted against rogue grave robber/archaeologist Belinda "the witch with the whip" Carlyle, possessed by the brain of B1-TCH, the only ‘bot ever to turn psychotic. Will their determination and technology be a match for B1-TCH's thirst for world domination, and the ancient magic poisons that she has now learned to wield...?
The last part of the Temple Treat series is a 34.000 words wannabe epic including some more Altaerna universe background, boobs, fedora hats, peril-filled underground mazes, boobs, evil potions, morphing microbots out of control, boobs, explosions and a tearful farewell.
And boobs. :)
Average Scores:

Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4

Very nice! One of the most imaginative stories I've read in a loooong time. I hope we see more from you!

Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

just putting this here because of the all 1s rating...

sum yung gai
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

A worthy end to the saga. Not as much body part description as one could hope for, but it definitely stands on its own as a story, not just whack-off material. I was sad to see the character farewells at the end.

Very Free
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Great story of epic proportions. Extra points for technical descriptions during BE. Due to consistencies in locations of errors (very few, BTW), I suspect that this story has more than one author.

elvis interuptus
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

loved it

Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
Due to comment spam, any new posts with http in them will be destroyed.
Your Nickname:

Rate this story from 1-5 stars (5 stars is best) in the following categories:

Overall Enjoyment(How much did you like the story overall?)
1 2 3 4 5

BE Description (Detail, quantity, quality)
1 2 3 4 5

Characters (Descriptions, likeability)
1 2 3 4 5

Technical Quality (Writing style, grammar, etc.)
1 2 3 4 5

Your comments on the story: