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The Overflowing Bra

Paul Gerard
Yrba’s Travels Pt. 1 - Jailbreak (World of Altaerna, 1200)
Mirca the naive, timid blond serf who’s fallen from her master’s grace isn’t the sharpest tool in the shed, but she’s the only tool that Yrba, the gypsy witch next door, can get hold of. Except that her door is a cell door as well. And time is running out, because the first thing in the morning waiting for both is the noose. Well, if life hands you lemons, make lemonade. And if life hands you a booby, then what choice do you have ...?
Average Scores:

Me
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

awsome

one_eyed_jack
Overall= 3, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 5

Wow. I can't express how outstanding your grammar and structure are. There were only two things that kept me from really enjoying this story - I didn't feel like Mirca or Yrba were very "sexy" in their descriptions. Also, the BE style/size wasn't my cup of tea, although the detail was excellent - except I actually liked the "restrained BE" scene and thought it was really clever. All-in-all, good job.

Prysm
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 5

Fantastic story. I'd love to see a continuation!

Excellent writing style and a stunning, exciting piece of descriptive writing you should be proud of. Great stuff!

Toymaker
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

The... breast manipulations (the shrinking and folding in particular) were a little weird for me. But on the whole, I found it very nice- I liked the way that it sort of threw you into the action and hinted at a more complex world with the magic and all.

I think I would have liked to see a little more reluctance on Mirca's part, and I missed the part where Yrba is revealed to have a large belly in addition to her huge boobs (the opening lactation scene was pretty hot,) until it gets poked, but, as they say, the devil's in the details.

Hopefully the impending Internet snafu will go away; I would like to see more of this. I'll be reading your other works in the meantime.

Merry Xmas!

Kisame17
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

The story was good but I got lost in the length of it. Mirca was hard to imagine with her description.

damnyankee
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 5

Very well done. (good thing its a story, and not a steak)

Thatguy
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Fantastic! Though I would have preferred a bit more sex, this was still a wonderfully crafted story.

ddddddd
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Nice

Red
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Excellent! Damn, beautifully written. Really looking forward to the next segment.

Oh-Sai
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

I don't know if it was to come across as humorous, but I enjoyed the story for some of the great comedic moments in it.

"Like two bunker-breaking flesh missiles from centuries yet to come"

That visual had me in stitches for a few minutes! The BE was also very well done, not too rushed yet not too drawn out to allow the reader to get distracted. For a bit, I thought you were going to take a little segue into GTS or muscle growth when describing Mirca. Perhaps something to cover in a future volume?

Great work, Paul Gerard!

Stretch
Overall= 4, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Really good story. Who knew boobs could be so destructive? I'm looking forward to your next one.

Ninja In The Night
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

I liked your story, the characters had a good bit of personality, & I liked what happened most of the story, the one part where she "kept" her chest under wraps, kinda freaked me out, but otherwise, almost all 5 out of 5's. I do hope to see more from you, and I hope your country doesn't do internet censorship. The idea of the "Free" online public must take a stand.

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