The Definitive BE Story Archive

The Overflowing Bra

Prevert-One
Get Closer
Prevert-One rewrites the classic Mowermandave story Get Closer. Two women get taught a lesson by a gilted wizard.
Average Scores:

matzcrorkz
Overall= 2, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

ENzEnE Awesome blog.Much thanks again. Really Cool.

acequia
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

I Loved it
totally
liddleamanda@live.com
lets RP sometime

G-man001
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 3

A good solid effort. Had moments of heat. I agree that the revenge is a little skewed. All in all, a very good outing as a writer. Thanks for sharing.

Genoharden
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

Not the most amazing story ever written, but there's just something about it... I loved it!

fahzbehn
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

Nicely done, good twist at the end.

OmniTrixie
Overall= 2, BE= 3, Characters= 2, Technical= 3

A disproportionate revenge story is rewritten into -- a disproportionate revenge story.

robbi
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Great story...

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