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The Overflowing Bra

pakled
pakled05@hotmail.com
Hands across the Sea
Yes, boys and girls, once again plot and character development get in the way of some serious fappage...;) 
Those how have not read my  'The Girl with the Hands' might want to read it, although it's not required. It picks up literally where the last one left off, and takes our heroes off to Jolly 'ol England to meet up with some more enhanced enhancers...;)

Worked slightly harder on descriptions, but if there's any suggestions, please sing out.
Average Scores:

G-man001
Overall= 3, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

Personally right sized was genius, Girl and Guy with Hands were precise, this one was fun. It got a little chaotic at the end, probably your intent, but I got a little lost. Overall though, a strong piece. Keep on doing the good work. Did I mention I loved right sized?

Anonymous
Overall= 4, BE= 5, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

A while ago, I would always hate reading your stuff, pakled, because there was always something not quite right about it.

Thankfully, that was a long time ago, and this is awesome.

pakled
Overall= 3, BE= 2, Characters= 3, Technical= 3

sigh...I need to edit my description. It's 'who', not 'how'...;)

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