The Definitive BE Story Archive

The Overflowing Bra

Short Scene: Bubbly
A short scene based off of a picture by the one and only test-0. Finding a magic wand allows a bubbly girl's friend to fulfill a fitting fantasy about her.
Average Scores:

Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5


Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

Hey Man, I liked this story a lot, I like the idea how she was to heavy to move nor could she talk. I like th idea of a hot girl with her mouth stuck open and unable to talk :)

Please do another one but, well, maybe have it go on a bit longer and stuff, if you want help, email me at

Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4

This was exactly what a short story should be. Effective and not boring. Maybe flesh out the characters a bit more, and add a bit more detail. Detail is key in these shorts. Look forward to a possible sequel. :D

Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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