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The Overflowing Bra

Paul Gerard
The Complete PDF Of Yrba’s Travels (World of Altaerna, 1200)
What starts out as a chance meeting of two women in a castle dungeon, only hours from their scheduled execution, soon balloons into a tale of golden-hearted whores, an exiled warrior queen, a mysterious living statue, a traveling bard, wolves in winter forests, a mischievous wizard, an upstarting vizier and a deserted throne. Can Yrba, the curvy dark-skinned traveling witch and castaway of the Southern Islands, bring a happy-ever-after to Mirca, her hapless six feet six and growing Amazon look-alike protege who’s blessed with much more muscle than experience? Find out in this conveniently formatted and indexed 800+ pages PDF of the original 12-part series!
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Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 4

What did you have a space 5 min to write this story - I mean no disrespect here. The main characters were given life & stayed true to form. As a lover of happy endings you made my day & giving just deserts to those that need a lesson. Well done however the reader digest version next time - joking again - couldnt help myself.

Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Your production of this work has been fantastic. The characters have personality, the relationships develop/change, and the variety and changes of setting help to keep the work from becoming a garden-variety work. I certainly encourage your production!

Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Very well written, and easy to follow!!!!

Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

It'll be a while before I work through most of this, but it's quite a nice thing to have waiting for me!

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