The Definitive BE Story Archive

The Overflowing Bra

First chapter in the story of Junko, a chaste Japanese woman and her attempt to reconcile with her estranged betrothed.

Average Scores:

Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 3

I have not read this story, just the reviews, but I do feel I need to say something.

Complaining about the political correctness of the story is absurd. It might turn you off, and that's fine, but to say that it shouldn't be written is dumb.

I am someone who enjoys some bimbo stories as well as some cultural change stories, which often include broken English and written accents.

I'm also female. If 'solly' in these stories offends you because it is 'politically incorrect', then I hope you also comment on all the stories that include rape, especially rape where the woman learns to love it, or where a stuck-up girl is transformed and raped because she was mean or rude.

These stories are erotic fantasy, and what we find arousing is usually not politically correct. If you want to bring political correctness into it, then the rape stories, the nonconsensual transformation stories, the 'bitchy' girl stories, all are far more monstrous than any Asian stereotype.

Overall= 3, BE= 2, Characters= 3, Technical= 3

No, the use of things like "solly" is just racist, even if it's not meant to be.

Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

I definitely don't see a problem using "engrish." Not every Japanese person speaks perfect English. Sorry you got offended Pete but the author did nothing wrong.

I agree with Pete that there should have been more to the story but overall I found it well done. There is no justification for Pete rating the technical or characters 1's, it was too short but it has potential and I can't wait to read the next installment.

Overall= 2, BE= 2, Characters= 1, Technical= 1

It's too short. I realize it's a chapter in a larger piece, but unless the chapter holds up on its own, I think it's better to wait until you have enough to really be a story.

I usually prefer at least *some* explanation as to why the BE is occurring. Out of the blue, with no reason at all, just doesn't do it for me.

Lastly, use of "Engrish" just threw the whole thing off. It shows a complete lack of respect, and maybe it was an attempt at humor but it just did not work here.

Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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