The Definitive BE Story Archive

The Overflowing Bra

Love Doll Disaster
My first story. What's the worst that can happen to a faulty cursed love doll? Answer is a lot!
Average Scores:

Overall= 3, BE= 2, Characters= 2, Technical= 3

not enough of a story.everything happened too fast.bad story line.

Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 2

I really liked the theme of this story, and the character of the doll. I thought it was very sexy overall. The only thing is that I had a lot of trouble parsing the text. It's hard to follow exactly what's happening to the main character. For instance, i have no idea what the final "click" refers to.

So that's why the low technical rating. other than that, good stuff.

Roid Abuser
Overall= 3, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 3

I liked everything about this but the end.

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