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Fitting in at the Ren-Faire Ch2 (includes Ch1)
The second chapter of 'Fitting in at the Ren-Faire'. Maria returns to the Renaissance Festival, where she finds her expanding bust and sex drive lead her to a new occupation. Will she be able to unlock the secret to her changes before they get out of hand? Also the plot thickens as a shady new character becomes curious of Maria's ring.

Have also included a re-edited/better formatted copy of chapter 1. I had to split what I intended to cover in chapter 2 into chapters 2 and 3 as the first part got too long. Hopefully chapter 3 wont take as long to write. Thanks for all the awesome feedback, it really helped, keep it coming.

Tried uploading yesterday but was having problems so sorry if multiples of this pop up, admins can delete the other ones.
Average Scores:

Wayne Boich
Overall= 3, BE= 2, Characters= 3, Technical= 4

LrhVX4 Is anybody strong in radio here? We need a colleague who would tell us briefly about the transistor T2. I hope there are radio amateurs here. If it`s not on the subject at all, then I`m sorry. I have to write because I have no choice. PS: if the spelling is not right then also I'm sorry, I'm just 13 years old!...

Exorban
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Absolutely fantastic. Or should I say orgasmic? :p Bad pun.
Sooo... when's the next part coming out, eh? :)

FeyOne
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

This is by far my favorite story set so far on this site. I can't wait to see more. It's a fantastic story, well executed, and I was really engaged in the main character as I find myself hoping that everything will work out well, (if highfully sexfully), for her.

jm
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

A really good plot, interesting characters, hopefully more to come?

Del
Overall= 5, BE= 2, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

With 90% of stories on here I'd cry foul if there was ever breast shrinkage, but with your writing style and the universe and rules you've got going here, swinging back and forth would quit honestly be pretty awesome.

Chaos Master
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

9/26/2010 I agree with Shifter1977 that the changes to the main character are a great way to keep us on our toes. Bahamad had a good point that changes UNKNOWINGLY created by others can be entertaining.
please flesh out ALL the players a little more. Other than that, keep it like you have been doing so far. Great work!

Mr. Justaguy
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

I am so glad this story got another chapter. Sure hope that there's more to come! Been loving the characters and all the expansion (got a real nice pace to it, just hope she's still got a bit more growing to do). Looking forward to see what happens next.

Polymorf
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 4

Very well written, kind of slow start, but one tends to get to know the main character and her thoughts, and keeps you curious on what will happen and how it will next.

shifter1977
Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 5

I really like how this one is continuing to develop. I also would request more detailed descriptions of the actual BE/other changes as they were happening, but it's going very well thus far overall. I also find myself curious how big the main character will wind up being, or even if a monkey wrench gets thrown in say if she's around someone who like women who are pregnant, or wider hips/bigger ass, etc.

Quite magical!

Bahamad
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

I'd personally like to see a bit more development in secondary characters outside the main, just to give some foreshadow and further motivation behind potential changes as well as giving more depth to the supporting cast.

The setting itself feels like it is developing very well, and I am eagerly awaiting to see what future changes are in store.

When the ability for modifications/change are able to be willfully controlled by another party, things can get very interesting. I'm interested to see where what others would like to see change on the main character, both in personality and body.

some guy
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Very well done slow growth. Curious as to how big the author plans on making her.

goony
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

Personally, I would like more expansion description, but so refreshing to see a story with a plot here again! Very enjoyable reading.

SoteriosJ
Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

Was initially disappointed at the slow progression of growth, but in hindsight I think it really improves the overall flow of the story.

Good effort in describing how her new assets felt, affected her movement, etc...too many stories rely on just the another letter/measurement/fruit.

AG is always appreciated, however would like more description here as well.

Keep it up!

deus
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 5

I like the story so far, I just wish there was some more BE or description of it.

Ninja In The Night
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

I really like the direction this story is taking. I am curious what will happen and how many chapters it will need to continue. This seems like it can have sub-stories, background stories, all while continuing with the main plot. Very nicely done.

Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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