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The Overflowing Bra

Rebellious Phase
The town of Rose Hills is and always has been super-conservative to the point of impossibility.  When several graduating students at Rose Hills High begin to act out in a rush of pent-up emotions and suppressed hormones, they find that things start to change in their favor, and not in the ways one would normally expect.
Average Scores:

Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 3

This story is quite interesting because of the innocence of its characters. I find it refreshing to have both women and men who actually have a moral compass of some sort as opposed to a pervert who views others as objects.

The premise is really creative and is very enticing. You will get drawn into the characters lives and desires.

Like Ox said, the perspective switching is sudden and not prefaced, so you can get easily confused. It could be easily fixed with indention spacing.

The stomach growth and fat growth is educating. It's not my cup of tea.. and usually I filter it out, but it's interesting to read about.

I had a LOT of trouble visualizing the inflation scene. Part of my confusion might be because I don't understand that fetish very well. But as a reader of this genre, the more descriptive, the better. It's perfectly fine to walk us through every anatomical detail. Don't skimp on the similes, comparisons or size metaphors. We need them.

Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1

Too bad, like about, like that tense stuff. English is like, like so cool when it isn't grammatically correct.

Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

I absolutely loved it, this may be my favorite story on this site as a whole. It has all my favorite fetishes (BE, WG, pregnancy, ass growth) in spades, and the cause behind it all was pitch-perfect and worked (for me at least) because of how the rebellion carried with it a sense of naughtiness and titillation. I don't mind how most other stories treat the subject of sex and eroticism so matter-of-factly, but in this story the Pleasantville aspect (someone else pointed out the comparison point) just made things so much more intriguing.

And don't mind those who complain about "too big." There's the story code for a reason.

Really looking forward to your next one.

Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 3

Psychically-inspired growth is fascinating to me, and your story has it in spades. I thoroughly enjoyed the story, from start to finish, and in light of that, I too can find little about which to complain.

My thoughts mimic those of Roid Abuser. I'm also more of a "realistically" large BE fan, although I do appreciate the occasional foray into impracticality (still, I prefer those to be temporary at best). Also, the problem with "hyperexpansion" is that it becomes more difficult to visualize mentally, as anything beyond a "L" or "M" cup in real-life practice becomes just "ENORMOUSLY HUGE".

One recommendation I'd like to make in regards to writing extra-large growth is to amp up the size comparisons and the descriptions of position on the body. It's not enough to say "breasts as big as her head", but also to say "breasts that covered her torso" or "breasts that passed her knees". Body proportion is key to imagining the perspective on very large expansions, and that is true for male growth as well. Size is relative, as we all know, and that little extra bit of perspective makes things a lot easier on the mind.

One last thought: During the course of the story, I found myself wondering why only the teenagers were affected with this "rebellion" growth. The adults even comment at some point to the effect that "we didn't grow like this when we rebelled". If you're going to introduce a plot point that affects only certain people, and then have others comment about the lack of the same effects on them, you have to explain it. I attributed the difference to some teenage hormonal connection, but that didn't explain why the adults hadn't grown similarly themselves as teenagers, to the point that the adults comment about it. It didn't ruin the story, but it bugged me, and that could have detracted from the story if the action wasn't so captivating.

Keep up the good work! I'd like to see a sequel to this, or even a variation with another emotion. Rage always plays well, but sexual arousal is a sure-fire winner (as certain body parts grow naturally during sexual arousal). Maybe you could even try a "effort"-based power-up growth mechanism. If you watch Japanese anime, you know what I mean.

Roid Abuser
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5

This was very good: well-written, novel idea, and did not neglect the male side of growth. In fact so good, I hate to say anything constructive.

To the extent I have any quibbles (and they are quibbles, and subjective quibbles at that) it would be to say that:

(1) There is such a thing as too much of good thing (gasp!). When a subject is so big they can't move or would look deformed (as opposed to super over-endowed?) forever, it crosses the line from really hot, to weird. Now, having anatomically impossible breasts, penis, muscles for a finite time (or perhaps as a punishment) --- different deal. Again, this is a subjective


(2) the girl turning into Jabba the Slut really didn't do a lot for me. Plump? Sure! But so fat as to be a shut in? Ick!

Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5


Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 3

Pleasantville meets BE. A great mash-up that doesn't leave much to be desired. Be careful with find-and-replace tool. Both in the use of Mammary (Her name was originally Mary I'm guessing) and during the wrap-up, Catherine's name appeared to have been replaced incorrectly.

Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

This is the best story I've read in a long time. The plot was great and flowed really well. A little advice; don't always trust the spellcheck. I look forward to seeing more!

Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4

Nearl flawless idea! Love each character's journey. Loved the descriptions. The concept was phenomenal! More like this! Please!

Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Didn't care for the very end but hte jurney was great!

Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Absolutely fantastic from start to finish. Great concept, told in a great and interesting way...

Overall= 4, BE= 2, Characters= 4, Technical= 5

An original premise, but the telling felt diminished by the multiple perspectives.
It may have been more effective as three stories-- Mark/Jenny was hurt by the digressive focus on James/Catherine, and Nicole had a small (ha) enough role to have been omitted entirely.

A better story than erotica in my opinion, but it seemed like a deliberate decision.

It was nice to see something new from you, looking forward to more.

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