The Definitive BE Story Archive

The Overflowing Bra

BeXALPHA
THE WITCH IS A BITCH
Brittney called from all her friends  Love  what her here happen some day is more than a dream .
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Thisishard
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1

I get the feeling that English is not your first language, if this is so may I recommend that you write in your native tongue first, as your writing is illegible. If English is your native tongue then I don't even know what to recommend. Community College maybe?

7895
Overall= 1, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 1

You two should team up and write the worst story ever seen.

Alloicius Knickenbracker
Overall= 1, BE= 2, Characters= 2, Technical= 1

Quite frankly i couldn't manage to read the whole thing. It was so full of misspellings, bad sentence build and even half finished sentences, that I chose not to subject myself to the torture it would have been to finish reading your story.

You seem to have good immagination, and a sence for where your story are going. But the technical Quality of your writing is so bad that it takes away any enjoyment the reader otherwise would have gotten out of your story.

I would reccomend a few things for you to get your writing better.
1. Use a spellchecker.
2. Get yourself a good dictionary.
3. Get yourself a Beta Reader
4. And most importantly. Start reading a lot of English. It is the
best way for a person to learn to write English fluently.

Good Luck with your writing. I hope to see you back here later with much better grammar. Then I am certain you will gett a lot more readers.

Pi-We
Overall= 2, BE= 2, Characters= 2, Technical= 2

A good story i like it ........ it can be a bit better your english i meen !

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