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The Overflowing Bra

The Light Fantastic
lightfantastically@gmail.com
Wish Upon a Star
When a once-in-a-lifetime meteor shower brings with it shocking transformations, two girls find themselves trying to keep control of their lives as they lose it over their bodies. They begin to find that the truth of their condition is a lot deeper than they first thought...
Average Scores:

Mor Sauce
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Extraordinary, a true epic. More stories from this universe of the blue meteorites would be amazing, I certainly hope you continue to write for this site!

xxxecil
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Excellent characterization. Not all the elements are things I enjoy, but it was overall very sexy to contemplate. The ending had a surprise twist, while at the same time coming across as Deus-ex-Machina, but for pure stroke story, this rocks.

Mjurgen
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

I gotta say, I was pleasantly surprised when reading this to find that, not only did it appeal to my... kinks... but it actually has a story arc. With a villain. And a little poetic justice. And some pretty believable characters. Especially Sarah. In fact the psychological aspect goes so far as to even come of as creepy when you think about how much she wants to resist but in the end, hell, I enjoyed the ride. Have you ever tried your hand at, like, NORMAL fiction writing? As opposed to adult fiction?

anon
Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 3

went straight to shemale.didn't care for that

Futalover
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Just......perfect

sw
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

So good!
I only ever feel the need to drop criticism when a writer's errors interfere with my reading of or enjoyment of the story, and I enjoyed the story all the way through!

Who cares about motivation or mechanics? You're writing smut! Beautiful, writhing, sticky-like-summer-in-Florida smut, and obviously having a great time with it. We're right there having a fapping good time with you. Truly one of the best stories on this site and I (as well as many other people) eagerly cross the fingers of our free hand in the hopes that you'll take us further into this well-lit, fantastic universe of yours.

Etch
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 3

It was good, overall. Each of the individual pieces were fairly enjoyable, though the whole they made was kind of a hodgepodge.

The story has a pretty inconsistent flow; the set up is slow, then the action comes fast. The plot seems to be building up to something, then unravels and stops abruptly. It feels a lot like you wanted to write a series of loosely connected vignettes about a few recurring characters, then tried putting those shorts in order and forgot to patch the space inbetween.

Specific issues -- the motivations of the characters are left almost completely unhinted at until the moment they are relevant. This is especially prominent with Charlotte and Summer, and to some degree with Mel. When it comes to Charlotte specifically, we aren't given much reason as to why she thinks the meteor can help her or why she's so malicious in her testing, nor do we get any natural revelation to her age besides the flashback. The transformations, while fun, are super fast and left mostly unexplored in terms of consequences and adaptation. Also, radiation as a mechanism for transformation is fine, but we lack even a theory on why it affects everyone so differently.

The whole goo-girl plot could have been stripped from the story and the ending could have been the same with very, very little tweaking. And it seems strange that over the course of a few days of dramatic transformation (especially the wake of super-sexed men with giant cocks left by the goo girl) didn't spur some police or government involvement.

All in all it's good, but the structure of the story could use a major overhaul. I look forward to your next story.

xtra123
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Wow. As has already been pointed out... best story on this site in a long while. So many fun things all wrapped up in one terrifically written package. Anxious to see another great installment.

Angry Crayfish
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4

I've been a fan of The Light Fantastic ever since his Hoferatu series. I've been hoping since it ended for him to produce something as grand - so you can imagine that this fetishistic epic is a dream come true for me. "Wish Upon a Star" indeed!

Breast expansion, butt expansion, pussy expansion, hourglass expansion, lactation, lip growth, giantess growth, futanari transformation, (with and without balls), goo girl/shapeshifting... this story has a little bit of something for almost everyone.

I only have two criticisms, both minor:

1) You overused the slang term "eye" when referring to urethras. Could have done with some variance in phrasing there.

2) The ending seems a bit abrupt and leaves a lot of things unexplained - although maybe that's the point.

I strongly advise anyone who has some or all of the fetishes I listed above to give this one a read - it's easily among the highest-quality stories I've seen for download on this website in several years.

RagtimeCactuar
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

I have to agree with fields, This is absolutely the best story I've read on here in quite a few years. Good to know there are still BE writers who care about the quality of their writing

fields
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4

Best upload in years

amanDDa
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

wow.... that is one of the best stories I have read on here in a long while. I love to rp and some of the stuff you had in your story reminded me of some role plays in the past..... I hope you keep writing. smoochies

anon
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Intriguing characters and while there are many common BE memes there is enough of a twist to make this a truly unique story. Fantastic job.

OAO
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Fantastic.

TableTop
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Sure, it strayed a little bit from B. E., but this is still probably the best story I've read here in years! Patiently waiting for a sequel.

anon
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Ending felt a little rushed, and I would have enjoyed some more explanation as to what, exactly, the original purpose of the meteorite was.

ktc
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Fantastic story. Over the years my tastes have broadened so much that as long as it's not rape or truly violent I'll probably enjoy it. Just a fair warning to those who come to this site, this ones not just BE, although each fetish is used exceedingly well in my opinion.

Catfish
Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4

Wow, what an epic. The descriptions of the transformations and the sex are great -- I'm not normally a fan of futa, but this story actually makes it appealing. Only markdown is for a few spelling/proofreading errors.

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