The Definitive BE Story Archive

The Overflowing Bra

The Devil's Plaything
This is the story of Hannah, A religious prudish girl, who with some special attention, becomes everyone's fantasy.
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Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 3

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Overall= 3, BE= 2, Characters= 3, Technical= 2

Yeah... proofreading is your friend. Hard to get through this one with all of the errors.

Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 3

For a short and fast paced story, this is a fun read, with a no-nonsense but still pretty good description of the setting and her rapid changes. The pretty decent writing style is sadly offset by a ton of grammatical, spelling, and formatting errors, which are quite distracting. A couple of proof-reading reviews before release should add some polish that would make it easier to read. Overall a fun read and I look forward to chapter two.

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