The Definitive BE Story Archive

The Overflowing Bra

Billy McFred
Scene: Laura and Water
Short scene of a girl who uses a water hose to fill herself.
Average Scores:

Overall= 3, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 4

A fairly good story that suffers a little from being too short.

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