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The Overflowing Bra

Bad Irving
SRU: Burglars
Eight unlucky burglars break into Spells-R-Us and pay for it in a variety of ways.
Average Scores:

Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Very entertaining. I wasn't a big fan of the male-to-female thing, but the part with Sandy and the Dickmeister was excellent!

Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 4, Technical= 2

some weird tense changes (sorry, bad grammar spoils a story for me). I would like to have had more background to the shop, and more development of the other characters besides the final three...Otherwise, most enjoyable!

Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

Quite a funny story all-round.

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