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The Overflowing Bra

Bad Irving
Witch Wish
Doing a favor for a witch gives a man one wish.
Average Scores:

Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

ginger is good but moves to slow

Overall= 3, BE= 1, Characters= 3, Technical= 2

Ginger was perfect, but I really didn't care for anything elseā€”it felt too sarcastic. I think the premise of the story is rather amusing, but it definitely could have been done better. You also really need to work on your composition skills. You had a lot of run-ons, fragments, and weirdly-constructed sentences. o_O;

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