The Definitive BE Story Archive

The Overflowing Bra

Prophet Tenebrae
The Best Craft
A bunch of young women and a magic cat. No it's not "Sailor Moon"!
Average Scores:

Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 2

Work on punctuation, and the description of the characters. BE didn't have enough description; Half of the time I didn't know what size the breasts were, even after the sequences.

Also, why does this have a WOW tag? The breasts don't even reach bean-bag size, much less room filling. :/

Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 3

This is a good one, with more than one character growing. The addition of the cat is different, but welcome.

Prophet Tenebrae
Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 3

Ironically, I found this while Googling my name - just to see what kind of results I got.

I look back at this story and it makes me smile... there's still a lot that I could do to make it better but I think while my overall quality of writing has improved over time, that my actual style hasn't varied so much...

In a Prophet's Final Thoughts - I shall tell you that the reason I wrote this story was simply because I felt that there were no stories out there like it (to my knowledge there still aren't). So, for all you frustrated readers out there - don't get mad, get writing.

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