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The Overflowing Bra

Encounter at Brownwater Sands
A most unusual trip to the beach! (Illustrated)
Average Scores:

Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5

I've been trying to find this story again for a while! It's one of my all time favorites!

Lol, nice joke
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 4

Lool, a poor jpg ( use paint and you can draw exactly the same in.... 10 minutes, maybe 12 but no more )

Yes im rude, but its just that your story is NOT illustrated !
Make MORE illustration or make REAL illustration please.

Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 4

Excellent characterization. Dealt with characters reacting to the situation in a plausible way. Good build up.

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