The Definitive BE Story Archive

The Overflowing Bra

In this version of Cinderella, the young maiden is transformed into a busty princess for the Prince's ball. But when midnight comes, she doesn't deflate...
Average Scores:

Overall= 3, BE= 4, Characters= 2, Technical= 4

Not bad. Silly, satirical, tongue in cheek. A nice, quick little story. Well written, for the most part, but it would have been better if it had gone about the standard "start a new paragraph when a new character begins speaking" sort of style. Other than that, enjoyable.

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