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The Overflowing Bra

More than beauty
Joe's a little guy with big dreams.  Suzy has always been shy about being the biggest girl in school.  Will these two make it work?  Is there a reason Suzy has such dramatic proportions?  And are they getting even bigger?

A slow growth story.

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Average Scores:

Overall= 3, BE= 1, Characters= 3, Technical= 4

Overall good, story, like the others already said, little to no BE at all. This is the BE Story site afterall, you have to cater to the masses! Other than that, keep up the good work, hope to see more BE in the continuation.

Overall= 5, BE= 2, Characters= 5, Technical= 4

Very enjoyable. Write with your mind, not from ur praises and critism. You're doing great.

Overall= 4, BE= 2, Characters= 3, Technical= 5

Please excuse my relative inexperience in providing feedback, but you seemed interested in any you might be able to garner, so here goes.

Your story was enjoyable. It built up a good sense of anticipation by providing the odd hint as it went along. However, as has been noted in other comments, your actual description of the process was a bit limited. Similies, metaphors, or just more time spent lingering on the process might help.

My real concern though is the female domination vibe I'm getting off the story. While a cliche of the genre, it doesn't seem to fit with the characterizations you've developed. The girl is body conscious, but denegrates the male about his at pretty much every opportunity she gets. As her confidence grows (and seemingly correspondingly her size) she becomes more aggressive (assertive?). Nothing wrong with that, but you threw in the phrase to the effect of "Already she was in control of the relationship" This could mean any number of things, but combined with her later actions it seems to foreshadow her taking an increasingly dominant role in the relationship.

That's all well and good, but you've previously established that the two will end up married. If she comes to crave, as the text suggests she will, exhibition (or just attention) as well as domination why would she bother marrying the guy? To quote the old proverb, why by the cow when you can get the milk for free. Simply put, it seems like if their eventual relationship is to make any sort of sense than the guy will need to assert himself at some point.

My apologies if I have been overly verbose. To conclude, I enjoyed your story, and look forward to your future writings.

Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 4

I usually do not write reviews but I enjoyed this story so I felt that I had to post. Overall, the story is very enjoyable. There was great character development. The build-up was so detailed that once the fonal connection between to two main characters happen that the whole story is over. Keep up the good work.

Overall= 4, BE= 2, Characters= 3, Technical= 4

Well, I'm not sure that there was any actual BE *or* growth in the story, but it was still quite a fun read. A few notes:

garrulous - sorry, but when I hit this word I had to reach for my thesaurus. Tonally jarring.
Maybe this is just a nit-pick, but would someone self-conscious about their height and weight really call attention to it by calling anyone "little man?" I know that's a Mini-GTS staple turn-on, but it just didn't seem to fit the character at all.

Other than that (and, of course, the few typos that we all miss), great job! Here's hoping for some more slow growth in the next one.

Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Superb writing. I usually skim stories on this site, but I didn't miss a word here. I'm primarily into BE, but as a very occaisonal GTS fan also, this one hit right on the money.

Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 4

I have to agree with DrKnow and Merkava. Only modest BE but excellently written and very enjoyable. The characters were well described and one can sympathise with them, which for me is by far the most important aspect of any story.
A few minor spelling ("hear" instead of "hair") and punctuation errors here and there but did not detract from overall enjoyment.
Looking forward to the next installment!

Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 5

One of, if not the most, amazing short story I've read in the past few years! Flies sir, you are a genius. The overall BE content was rather lacking in this story, but given that it does appear to be far more GTS based, it was incredible. This is the type of story that drives me into a frenzy. I am a huge MiniGiantess fan and a huge BE fan, this story delivered both of those aspects in a modest but hot way! Keep up the awesome work.

Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

A short but sweet story. Hopefully we will be seeing more from you in the near future.

Overall= 5, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

You have a nack for describing growth quite well. I liked the drama added to the story and it was just the right amount to make the charecters believable. I hope you decide to continue this little gem!

Merkava IV
Overall= 4, BE= 3, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Some would say that GTS is not BE. That may or may not be the case, but I will say that this story was hot. I enjoyed it, it was technically sound (more so than my spelling) and the characters were well developed for it's length. The BE description was rather limited, but that was primarily due to the GTS nature of the story. Overall I liked it alot! Please write more and/or continue.

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