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The Overflowing Bra

BE Weary of How You Wish
When two friends make wishes on a camping trip, the river spirit grants them as best it can... however, being popular can mean many different things.
Average Scores:

Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

Liked it a lot !

Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 2

Weary means tired. Wary means cautious.

Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 3, Technical= 3

When writing your story, you have to ask "he who?" "Which blonde?"

Other than that, great story!

Overall= 2, BE= 3, Characters= 2, Technical= 3

Great ideas...poor execution. It was difficult to tell who was who in such a short story. Who was important to the story? I couldn't tell. Focus, focus and FOCUS!

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