The Definitive BE Story Archive

The Overflowing Bra

Descent Into Dairy
A quick story about a woman who is changed from a smart but plain college student into a lactating, submissive pet.  My first free work in a long time and, given the ending, possibly the first of more quickies.
Average Scores:

Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 4

Would love to see another like this.

Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Thank you for this! Such a treat. You delivered a lot of tasty entertainment in not many words at all. Really impressed! Please, more!

Overall= 4, BE= 2, Characters= 3, Technical= 2

The formatting is pretty bad. You need to separate your paragraphs more. Proof reading needs to be done to correct a few tense and pronoun issues.

The story itself is too short, and deserves a lot more of the actual action. It's 90% build up, 5% action, and 5% closure.

Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Trying to be a little bit more subjective to the actual flavor of the story compared to personal tastes. While I personally dislike intelligence loss, it was a good short story and I'd love to see more from you. If there was any writing errors or grammatical flaws I can't remember, which likely means they were inconsistent and few and far between.

Overall= 5, BE= 5, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

I love how her mind changes along with her clothing. Wonderful story.

Please give the authors feedback, I can not emphasize enough how important it is to them.
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