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The Overflowing Bra

Cow Girl (1st person)
A short, first person account, strictly dialogue, of a woman being transformed into a milky cow-girl.  This was written as a script for and used by someone on Reddit.
Average Scores:

Overall= 5, BE= 4, Characters= 4, Technical= 4

what subreddit was this on

bitches dawn
Overall= 4, BE= 5, Characters= 3, Technical= 5

Felt good. Loved the rapid growth.

Overall= 2, BE= 2, Characters= 1, Technical= 4

This isn't bad per se, but it still feels really lacking. I get that it's a script, and I've read similar things before, but it just feels incomplete.

Overall= 2, BE= 1, Characters= 1, Technical= 4

Good start, but try broadening your writing repertoire. You need to expand on this story, and go beyond the one-sided conversation by using more modes of writing. Description probably needs to go beyond what a person is saying. And how does everything in the story make the person feel?

Overall= 1, BE= 2, Characters= 1, Technical= 1

a poor attempt really, bad stucture, unable to follow dialogue

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