The Definitive BE Story Archive

The Overflowing Bra

The Changing Room
Lily goes to the mall expecting to buy some new clothes, but leaves getting moooore than she expected.
Average Scores:

Overall= 2, BE= 2, Characters= 1, Technical= 2

Interesting story, but the ending was a bit tragic.

Overall= 3, BE= 3, Characters= 3, Technical= 3

Overall a great first effort. I liked how it started out slowly, and the slow speech change is always fun. Keep up the good work!

Overall= 2, BE= 2, Characters= 2, Technical= 2

On the low side of mediocre, but everyone has to start somewhere. Word of advice, convert to some other formats. Limiting your audience to people who can open .docx files is a bad idea, try including .rtf, .html, or even .txt in the zip next time.

Overall= 4, BE= 4, Characters= 5, Technical= 5

Nice little story. Would love to see the story continue.

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