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The Overflowing Bra

Wedding Knight
Lady Khanim, unremarkable daughter of a minor noble, takes up arms as a maiden knight fighting imperial invaders - to no avail. Defeated, her king is forced to provide hostages to the Imperium, Lady Khanim amongst them. Now she must call on magic to help her seduce and ultimately assassinate the empress who conquered her people.

Much shorter than most FOF stories, this one is under 6k words, and is a bit more BE-focused than usual.
Average Scores:

Overall= 2, BE= 1, Characters= 2, Technical= 3
If this is more BE focused than your other stories then what are they even doing here? The only BE here after reading the whole thing was and then she decided to go a bit bigger without any description or process at all and only then maybe 3 or 4 times doing this.

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